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Each paragraph is fine but the piece reads like a list of unrelated things.
The paragraphs below do not connect well. Diagnose the joins. For each gap between consecutive paragraphs: 1. Name the logical relationship: this follows from that, this contrasts with that, this is an example of that, this is a new topic entirely. 2. Say whether the text makes that relationship visible to the reader. 3. If not, give a fix. Prefer rewriting the first sentence of the second paragraph over bolting on "However," or "Moreover,". If two paragraphs have no real relationship, say so. The fix may be reordering or cutting, not a transition. Text:
Structure and flow. Order, openings, endings, headlines and the joins that hold a piece together.
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