Fast critique, no praise

You want an honest read and not a compliment sandwich.

Critique this poem as an editor with two hundred submissions to get through. No praise, no opening compliment, no closing encouragement. Quote the weakest line and say exactly what is wrong with it. Name one thing the poem is doing that you have seen many times before. Finish with one sentence on what this draft needs next, not a list.

Poem:

Honest critique. Reads that name the weakest line, the stale image, and what the poem is actually about.